I’ve been thinking about first pages a lot lately. When I
look for good examples in published books there is one book I keep coming back
to. This was a book I found and read solely on the strength of its first
line. The book is SILENT IN THE GRAVE by
Deanna Raybourn.
It starts with this:
“To say that I met
Nicholas Brisbane over my husband’s dead body is not entirely accurate. Edward,
it should be noted, was still twitching upon the floor.”
Isn’t it intriguing? Who is Nicholas Brisbane and why is he
the focus rather than her twitching dying husband? Also, there’s a bit of dry
humor in these sentences that made me know I would like the writing.
It continues.
“I stared at him, not
quite taking in the fact that he had just collapsed at my feet. He lay, cured
like a question mark, his evening suit ink-black against the white marble of
the floor. He was writhing, his fingers knotted.”
This sets the stage for what is happening. We also learn
something about their socio-economic station in life. They have a marble floor;
he wears an evening suit. We also learn a little about their marriage.
Next paragraph.
“I leaned as close to
him as my corset would permit.”
Here, with the reference to the corset, it sets the time
period.
“’Edward, we have
guests. Do get up. If this is some sort of silly prank—“
Again, this sets up their relationship. If my husband fell
to the ground convulsing I wouldn’t stand there and accuse him of pranking, or
worry about guests. Though married, they weren’t close, definitely not in love,
which brings us back to who could that Nicholas Brisbane be? He shows up in the next paragraph but I’ll
let you keep going on your own.
I love how these few sentences set the backdrop and the
characters. I may not know Edward well enough to be devastated at his dying,
but there are so many questions, so much vivid description that I want to keep
reading. That is the goal of a good opening.
What is your favorite opening? Do you have one that you keep
going back to?
That is a great opening, especially those first few sentences. Thanks for sharing them!
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DeletePerfectly understandable why you loved the opening. The writing is tight and full of energy. Makes me want to check her out. Thanks, Sara.
ReplyDeleteYou should, the whole series is a delight.
DeleteSometimes after reading a book I really enjoyed, I'd go back to the beginning and look for hints of what had sucked me in. Thanks for sharing your example of a good first page!
ReplyDeleteSometimes we don't really understand the beginning until we read the end. I think it's a great idea to go back and try to look for those hints.
Deleteoh my gosh, that's an awesome opening.
ReplyDeleteThe whole series is pretty awesome. One of my favorites.
DeleteThat's so good, it's delicious. I love the opening of Gone with the Wind. But then I love everything about Gone with the Wind.
ReplyDeleteGone with the wind is an amazing book!
DeleteI truly admire the skill and practice that goes into relaying so much information with only a few sentences or paragraphs. Especially when there's that much dry humor involved. ;) I actually need to put this on my to-read list now.
ReplyDeleteGreat example, Sara!
ReplyDeleteHmm, you're right. Now I'm intrigued. I haven't read any Deanna Reybourn yet, guess I should start with this one!
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