tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post7405356165086563449..comments2024-01-03T04:03:15.300-05:00Comments on S.P. Bowers: False Start FridayS.P. Bowershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-644435077766212322012-11-11T06:05:25.281-05:002012-11-11T06:05:25.281-05:00Great voice in this piece. It flows quite smoothly...Great voice in this piece. It flows quite smoothly and almost feels autobiographical... that last line hints at so much possibilities... michellehttp://writer-in-transit.co.za/thankful/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-31825489904661784882012-11-10T20:35:28.404-05:002012-11-10T20:35:28.404-05:00I have a folder where I jot down paragrpahs, chara...I have a folder where I jot down paragrpahs, character sketches or bit like this that appear out of nowhere. I may not have time to work on it right then but I put it in the folder and someday it may turn into something. Or not. This one came to me in the shower. S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-57025737894062288562012-11-10T14:10:32.581-05:002012-11-10T14:10:32.581-05:00I like it. I can tell because I want to know more....I like it. I can tell because I want to know more. Maybe you can use this woman for an upcoming book. I erase my bad starts almost immediately, or at least I think I have. I can't find any on my computer. There's a story there somewhere. Joylene Nowell Butlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04497637513532136615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-13916720803701945052012-11-10T12:46:45.166-05:002012-11-10T12:46:45.166-05:00You should sign up and share some on fridays. It&...You should sign up and share some on fridays. It's an easy post to prepare early.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-44165810453348001532012-11-10T12:46:19.412-05:002012-11-10T12:46:19.412-05:00It's possible. That's why it's still ...It's possible. That's why it's still hanging around instead of in the garbage.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-45556947846402590702012-11-10T12:45:59.867-05:002012-11-10T12:45:59.867-05:00Glad you enjoyed it.Glad you enjoyed it.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-88514755397354516062012-11-10T12:45:50.617-05:002012-11-10T12:45:50.617-05:00Thanks Carol, right now it's wide open.Thanks Carol, right now it's wide open.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-39723296605040437872012-11-10T12:45:12.902-05:002012-11-10T12:45:12.902-05:00I do have more false starts to share. Or false mi...I do have more false starts to share. Or false middles since I don't always begin at the beginning. S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-19133008594982394332012-11-10T12:06:14.274-05:002012-11-10T12:06:14.274-05:00Is FSF nudging you in that direction? Or, like me,...Is FSF nudging you in that direction? Or, like me, do you have many more false starts to share? :)Suzehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908805179119217608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-52229911922256100772012-11-09T22:47:59.952-05:002012-11-09T22:47:59.952-05:00That's an interesting beginning! Oh, how many ...That's an interesting beginning! Oh, how many false starts I have... Hmm, maybe I'll share one in a future blog post...Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-38975409623829491092012-11-09T16:57:44.967-05:002012-11-09T16:57:44.967-05:00Gosh this character has incredible voice. Maybe sh...Gosh this character has incredible voice. Maybe she'll find new life in another setting! Tanya Reimerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00293977395016853814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-57921387242637945742012-11-09T14:58:09.058-05:002012-11-09T14:58:09.058-05:00This was an interesting read. I too am curious abo...This was an interesting read. I too am curious about that last line.Loreehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12520908604580765632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-85581334160340273522012-11-09T14:09:34.894-05:002012-11-09T14:09:34.894-05:00Good backstory for some character. Maybe a woman w...Good backstory for some character. Maybe a woman who's wild and wacky ... and bound and determined NOT to be her mother :)Carol Kilgorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745686632918324803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-79963322001543825252012-11-09T13:04:06.570-05:002012-11-09T13:04:06.570-05:00Thanks Lily! That part flowed up really well but ...Thanks Lily! That part flowed up really well but then I never met the other characters. They're probably hanging out somewhere in there, I'll just have to go find them. S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-2041345083783501032012-11-09T13:02:34.025-05:002012-11-09T13:02:34.025-05:00Thanks for you suggestions Chris. I'll defini...Thanks for you suggestions Chris. I'll definitely keep your ideas with the story in case I ever choose to do more of it. I know it's a lot of telling but so far that's all I've got. I always start with telling. :)S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-71340926538986138342012-11-09T13:01:08.795-05:002012-11-09T13:01:08.795-05:00Maybe someday. I didn't delete it after all so...Maybe someday. I didn't delete it after all so there's always a chance I'll discover it again.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-69011009269475066202012-11-09T13:00:36.383-05:002012-11-09T13:00:36.383-05:00If only I had written more...If only I had written more...S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-59435964539232353152012-11-09T13:00:14.190-05:002012-11-09T13:00:14.190-05:00Thanks. Her voice was very strong for this segmen...Thanks. Her voice was very strong for this segment. Then she went back to hiding with her books. I Don't even remember how long ago this was.S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-89243670426261301732012-11-09T12:41:59.431-05:002012-11-09T12:41:59.431-05:00I could have believed this was autobiographical- f...I could have believed this was autobiographical- for someone who doesn't like first person narration, there was a real flow here. And nice to have the intrigue of wondering who the mother figures were. Lisa Southardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09711376747848601409noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-688601955010379742012-11-09T12:37:04.958-05:002012-11-09T12:37:04.958-05:00Yes, I absolutely think there is some potential he...Yes, I absolutely think there is some potential here. The character is sympathetic, and the relationship with her mother has a lot of tension and drama and possibilities for development.<br /><br />As just a thought, I do think maybe changing or holding off on the opening line might be an idea, because as I was reading, I did keep wondering about who the mother figures were. So maybe an opening line that instead emphasizes the mother might work better since that's where the scene focuses?<br /><br />And the scene is all backstory/history, which can be less effective than 'live' events. I'm not sure where you were thinking about what would happen with the narrator -- would maybe setting the story back when she was a girl and making that the 'present' work? Or instead, perhaps open with something where the narrator is acting in the present and then trickle in the backstory of the history with the mother. Maybe Mom is now in the hospital, or dying, or getting remarried, or something in the present that then gets the character reflecting about the past?<br /><br />Just some thought-starters...<br /><br />But yeah -- definitely think this is worth blowing the dust off and revisiting. Nice work.<br />StratPlayerCJFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07341440379767694905noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-4335131573868571002012-11-09T12:11:15.417-05:002012-11-09T12:11:15.417-05:00I think this should have another chance to fly! ^_...I think this should have another chance to fly! ^_^Victoria Lindstromhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09694066132860951997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-72140733090487823822012-11-09T10:33:40.439-05:002012-11-09T10:33:40.439-05:00I like it, Sara. :)I like it, Sara. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-11841773274386444812012-11-09T10:31:54.747-05:002012-11-09T10:31:54.747-05:00Sara, that last line leaves me curious!Sara, that last line leaves me curious!Suzehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908805179119217608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-56183474042882113722012-11-09T10:21:32.155-05:002012-11-09T10:21:32.155-05:00But, Sara, it's such a _good_ voice! Then, as ...But, Sara, it's such a _good_ voice! Then, as you know, I _love_ first person. <br /><br />My false starts are all SF that have way too ambitious science bits that are far above my level of understanding. LOL!Zan Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13403563510118660546noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-83528601653366510.post-50303253374137703842012-11-09T08:54:40.788-05:002012-11-09T08:54:40.788-05:00Definitely NOT autobiographical. I don't real...Definitely NOT autobiographical. I don't really like writing in first person so that may be one reason this didn't go anywhere. <br /><br />Always glad to meet another Georgia writer!S.P. Bowershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746614009206426805noreply@blogger.com